Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.Write a letter to the

Essay topics:

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.

Write a letter to the college enrollment officer. In your letter

explain why you are writing

describe your circumstances

ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enroll in the course

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in regard to the computer course that starts on October 18 at your education center. I would like to apply for it, but there is a problem with one of the requirements to candidates.

Computers have always been my passion since my childhood, when I both played computer games as well as learned how to fix them. However, I have never taken any courses in computing, because my father has always wanted me to follow in his footsteps and work as a plumber. Although he has frequently showed me how to fix pipes, I have never abandoned the idea of assembling and mending computers, so in the evening I try to devote two hours to either reading books about modern technologies or watching how specialists fix various laptops.

Now that I have reached the maturity, I intend to study computer science instead of plumbing. Nevertheless, my qualifications do not meet the requirements of your course. It is said that the applicant must have an IT certificate at elementary level. Honestly, I do not have it. Having said that, I would be grateful, if you allow me to take this course without it.

It would be great, if you either contact me at the following number 87001444413 or send a message to my email address tolikxxx@mail.ru. I look forward to your reply as soon as possible, since the course begins this Friday.

Yours faithfully,

Tolegen

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...hood, when I both played computer games as well as learned how to fix them. However, I hav...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 212, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...It is said that the applicant must have an IT certificate at elementary level. Honest...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 218, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'certificates'?
Suggestion: certificates
...said that the applicant must have an IT certificate at elementary level. Honestly, I do not...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, well, as well as, in regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 937.175257732 123% => OK
No of words: 239.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8410041841 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91289726925 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 127.690721649 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63179916318 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.83505154639 381% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8612909818 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3846153846 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 4.34317383033 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292371884566 0.216113520407 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919840918515 0.0766984524023 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635230911732 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147681049431 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985261066122 0.0580467560999 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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