The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words

Essay topics:

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing carbonated beverages in multiple stages.

Overall, there are five stages in the process starting from collection raw water to sending off the packed carbonated drinks to various markets.

In stages 1 and 2, the raw water is purified with water softener and several chemicals, after being filtered, which is then pumped into electrical heaters for heating. After the water is converted to steam, it is sent to another chamber via a cooling pipe for carbonation. The carbon dioxide chamber is attached to the latter chamber and is bubbled through the liquid.

The third stage is about sending the carbonated liquid to a mixing tank where coloring agent, sweetener and flavour is incorporated from three separate containers, followed by filtration and filling the final product into bottles and cans.

The bottles and cans are packed and transported to the supermarkets, in the final stage of the process.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...final product into bottles and cans. The bottles and cans are packed and transpo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 32.9175257732 3% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 153.0 206.0 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32679738562 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77764705575 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 127.690721649 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.6703418263 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.428571429 76.5299724578 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 4.34317383033 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 7.41237113402 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0883203139178 0.216113520407 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445288810317 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382158641841 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0590126262458 0.12726935374 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346232524647 0.0580467560999 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 8.37731958763 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 70.7449484536 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 8.71597938144 156% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 7.59969072165 132% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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