A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say-What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it?-Why do you need it back?-What should he/she do about it?

Essay topics:

A while ago you have lent a friend a suitcase, which he/she has not returned yet. Write a letter to him/her reminding to bring it back and say
- What suitcase and when dud he/she borrow it?
- Why do you need it back?
- What should he/she do about it?

Dear Maria,
Hope this letter finds you in radiant health and good spirit. I am writing to remind to return the suitcase you borrowed last month for your goa tour.

While you went on goa trip, you were thinking to buy a duffer bag. At that time,I showed you my black suitcase, which you found adequate and convenient to carry your items and you told me to return it after a weeks tour, but still I did not get it back.

I would have not asked you if I had not needed it. Our family is planning for holidays, I would require this bag. Additionally, I am more comfortable with this bag due to its optimum size and compactness. Thus, I insist you to return soon.

Moreover, I would be happy if you visit my house during weekend. this way you could return the bag as well as we can spend some time together.

Looking forward to hear from you.

Yours faithfully,
Shamim

Votes
Average: 6.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Maria, Hope this letter finds you in radiant he...
^^^
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'returning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'remind' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: returning
...and good spirit. I am writing to remind to return the suitcase you borrowed last month fo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... borrowed last month for your goa tour. While you went on goa trip, you were thi...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 80, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...inking to buy a duffer bag. At that time,I showed you my black suitcase, which you...
^^
Line 8, column 67, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... if you visit my house during weekend. this way you could return the bag as well as...
^^^^
Line 10, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...some time together. Looking forward to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Shami...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Shamim
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 720.0 937.175257732 77% => OK
No of words: 163.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41717791411 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27566844408 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.699386503067 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 210.6 290.88556701 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1672717797 44.8134815571 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.0 76.5299724578 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5833333333 16.8248392259 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 4.34317383033 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189620090583 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071508827126 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528027059069 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108714814446 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471382627975 0.0580467560999 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 8.37731958763 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 70.7449484536 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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