work with mistakes 18/09/2017
You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course.
You now find that you cannot continue the course.
Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter.
Describe the situation
Explain why you cannot continue at this time
Say what action you would like to take.
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to inform you that I will no longer attend the course.
I work in an insurance company and the boss told me that taking a Business English course would considerably increase my chances on getting promoted to a manager position. It appears that studying the course for two terms has just paid off because one week ago I was promoted to a new post – the head of human resources department.
Although continue studying is desirable, it appears impossible. Firstly, the novel job often requires working extended hours and now my working hours overlap with the studying. Secondly, my new work assumes a lot of travelling around the country and abroad.
Finally, I would like to get a full refund for the next term because the money was paid in advance; it will be convenient to get the whole sum on my credit card. I would also like to sell textbooks for a half of their price, maybe some of your students would like to buy them.
I am waiting for your prompt response.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
and more serious issue is duplicated words/phrases, like: 'It appears...'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 69
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 183 350
No. of Characters: 822 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.492 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.409 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 45 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.856 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.817 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'resources'' or 'resource's'?
Suggestion: resources'; resource's
...moted to a new post – the head of human resources department. Although continue study...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...avelling around the country and abroad. Finally, I would like to get a full refu...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73913043478 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51185751315 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657608695652 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6231036368 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 4.34317383033 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113960194412 0.216113520407 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415976581883 0.0766984524023 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345895818647 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653695951211 0.12726935374 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436163608397 0.0580467560999 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.