You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to this friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:

give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Jack,
I hope this letter finds you in a radiant of health and the best of spirit. I am writing this letter to inform you that my application for Texas university has been approved and it’s about three months that I have been living in Texas.
As I said in our last conversation, I had applied for data analyst major. Fortunately, the first semester has been allotted to be familiar with campus and aver come to culture shock more than academical courses. So, our curricular is not very intensive. All of course are arranged to hold in morning and I always free in the evening.
On the contrary what I had supposed, there is a shortage of affordable accommodation so that my money is tight now. To assist in covering the cost, I aim to find a part time job. Besides, by working I could make a contribution to society and it will uphold my language skills and undermine my home sick feeling simultaneously.
I remember that your parents had established an Iranian restaurant. I am really eager to say that I am fully ready to work there as a chef assistant in the case of there is a job vacancy.

I look forward to hearing from you as early as possible. In addition, it takes ages since I last saw you so you are more than welcome to come to my accommodation. Please find the address in below line.
Best Regards,
Sahar

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 164, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...t in covering the cost, I aim to find a part time job. Besides, by working I could make a...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the case of there is a job vacancy. I look forward to hearing from you as ear...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, look, really, so, in addition, of course, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1094.0 937.175257732 117% => OK
No of words: 244.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48360655738 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72587509895 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 127.690721649 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622950819672 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 355.5 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7919382013 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9333333333 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2666666667 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208048751658 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577454142931 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696318918081 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107119267248 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093064692401 0.0580467560999 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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