You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a letter to the manager In the letter describe what

Essay topics:

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.

You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:

describe what the group does
explain why the group is good for the community
suggest alternative days and times for practice
You should write at least 150 words.

To the manager,
I am writing this letter with regard to a conversation that I had with your staff and he said that we could not use the hall for our regular practice on Tuesday and Friday evenings. As you know it is about one month that our group has been practicing twice a week here to be more concerted and prepared for New Year's concert tour which will be held in couple of next months.
My team member and I made a decision to allot all income of this tour to victims and injured parties of Kermanshah's horrible earth quick.So they could build or renovate their ruined house as soon as possible by this remittance.
For achieving our goal, we arranged a new schedule that we can displace our days of practice and change them to on Monday and Thursday evenings. On behalf of all, I would thank you if it was possible that we could continue our practice in this equipped hall. I hope that our request does not cause you any inconvenience.
your faithfully,
Sahar

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd I made a decision to allot all income of this tour to victims and injured part...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ies of Kermanshahs horrible earth quick.So they could build or renovate their ruin...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Your
... does not cause you any inconvenience. your faithfully, Sahar
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nconvenience. your faithfully, Sahar
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, you know, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 178.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47752808989 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46442303314 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657303370787 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1264164614 44.8134815571 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.857142857 76.5299724578 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 16.8248392259 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 4.34317383033 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160639527571 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680429960094 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576276098192 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991956062407 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725741738885 0.0580467560999 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 8.62886597938 197% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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