You have a friend who lives in a city abroad You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do Tell him her what type of work or studies you have been

Essay topics:

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city.
Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.

Dear Mark,
How have you been? it has been a long time since we last met. I have an exicting news to share that is I have planning to pursue master of science and would wish to apply in universties of singapore.

To edulcidate I am currently working as Technical Programmer in one of the software firms and now feel an urge to continue my studies in singapore as I believe singapore has one of the best ranked universties in the world additionally it also a buisness hub where most of the multinational companies have their regional offices so it becomes easier to find a job. In the past I completed my graduation in Computer science from Delhi college of Engineering and presently having a work experience of 3 years with a software firm.

since you are native and have pursued masters from singapore so I would need you valuable suggestion along with assistance in contacting some of the local universties and sharing information like admission procedure, schloarship being provided to foreign student and placement record in the past. This would help me in sorting out college and make things easier for me to apply.

I look forward to your earliest response.
Warm wishes
Ben

Votes
Average: 9.4 (5 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ome of the local universties and sharing information like admission procedure, sc...
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...to your earliest response. Warm wishes Ben
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 989.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 205.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8243902439 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81440164741 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643902439024 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.355848008 44.8134815571 262% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 109.888888889 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 16.8248392259 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.55555555556 4.34317383033 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259567512777 0.216113520407 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922874105813 0.0766984524023 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830237719945 0.0603063233224 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138792004227 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832647546964 0.0580467560999 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 8.37731958763 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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