You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

Essay topics:

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Jale, I have encountered with a minor accident in the supermarket and I hope you can help me with this one.
As I turned myself in a corner, another customer rushed right into my face and I got hurt so badly straight to the ground. Although that young man apologised to me and I accepted it, I found out similar cases happen all the time so that every time you have to be slow and careful enough to protect yourself from blind corners.
As a customer, I sincerely hope I can be a part of improving the shopping environment. There are too many blind spots in the supermarket, hence a lot of danger exists within these blind spots. To create more transparency in every lane, some extra penetrated holes on shelters can give customers more information about the surroundings, therefore a lot of blind spots can be minimized to reduce the danger.

Kind Regards,
Jale

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Jale, I have encountered with...
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... I hope you can help me with this one. As I turned myself in a corner, another ...
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...o protect yourself from blind corners. As a customer, I sincerely hope I can be...
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...n be minimized to reduce the danger. Kind Regards, Jale
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...duce the danger. Kind Regards, Jale
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 742.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58024691358 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67186279306 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672839506173 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9700495225 44.8134815571 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 16.8248392259 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 4.34317383033 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137438194121 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532914333199 0.0766984524023 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708519782426 0.0603063233224 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109430178199 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087518498839 0.0580467560999 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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