You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

Essay topics:

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Liam Test, I'm the student that got hurt in the accident in front of your row of bean-tins in your supermarket.

Let me give you some details about the accident first. I was just going around the corner from the vegetables to beans when a pregnant woman crashed into me with her shopping cart. It was impossible to see each other before the accident because this special corner is very dark and the lights didn't even work, probably because the eight bulbs were old and didn't serve anymore. Anyway, the floor was very slippery and wet because the rain was dripping through the non-waterproof ceiling, so I slipped, fell, and knocked myself out on the bean-tins. I lost consciousness. Your insurance payed for the accident but let me just give you some advice to prevent further accidents in your supermarket.

Make sure your ceiling is fixed and the floor is dry. You could also arrange your rows in a way that makes it possible for your customers to take care of each other. Always get the lights checked at leas once a week, and change damaged lightbulbs immediately. This could help making our supermarket a safer place.

Yours sincerely,
Liam Test

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... Sir or Madam, My name is Liam Test, Im the student that got hurt in the accide...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...cial corner is very dark and the lights didnt even work, probably because the eight b...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ly because the eight bulbs were old and didnt serve anymore. Anyway, the floor was ve...
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Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to make' or 'make'.
Suggestion: to make; make
...lightbulbs immediately. This could help making our supermarket a safer place. Yours...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 987.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74519230769 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48337203202 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658653846154 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1363376629 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.25 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 4.34317383033 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180801589707 0.216113520407 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602885286073 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072322075377 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124608046433 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306306082892 0.0580467560999 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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