Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son.Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Essay topics:

Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son.

Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

In this letter, I would like to ask you whether my son, John, could study at your school. My family moved into Almaty city a week ago, on October 7, but we have not decided about what school our son will study at.

My son is a fourteen-year-old boy. His performance in both mathematics and physics are outstanding. The former teacher in maths used to say that he could find a solution to complicated equations both faster and correctly than anyone else in the class. His classmates also would address to him to help them with the formulas and laws of physics. However, he does not seem to be interested in languages and literature, since although we have tried to motivate him to study these disciplines, he remains reluctant to either.

His favorite hobby is to play football. He always ready to participate in any championship as a defender. Nevertheless, he has a wasteful pastime. He plays video games for many hours. You might think that we are too permissive parents. In my opinion, he develops social skills, because while he is taking part in the communication with other children from different countries, he learns languages as well as makes friends.

My household would be grateful, if you as the Principal allow my child to continue his eduction at your school. You could either send me a message to my email address “tolikfdfxxx@mail.ru” or phone on the following phone number 87001444413.

Yours faithfully,

Tolegen

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 398, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...ifferent countries, he learns languages as well as makes friends. My house...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, well, while, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1222.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 244.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00819672131 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31463896932 2.54303337028 130% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668032786885 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 365.4 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.13402061856 186% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2931221023 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.375 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133457429586 0.216113520407 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468360440646 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609562020849 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831129103938 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741778041808 0.0580467560999 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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