Individuals can do nothing to change society Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions How far do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Individuals can do nothing to change society. Any new developments can only be brought about by governments and large institutions. How far do you agree or disagree?

In the past history, a large number of changes and developments were brought about by big organizations, governments, and institutions. These actions led many people to believe that individuals are incapable of becoming agent of change among society. I believe that both individuals and governments have their own function to bring influences or changes to society.

First and foremost, looking back to history were almost most important matters solved by the organizations, governments, and institutions. In my opinion, it is understandable and natural due to they have great power to make policy or decision. For instance, when Indonesia was under the leadership of former President Soeharto, there was a large number of changes and developments especially economic development. He divided this economic development into three periods: economic recovery, rapid economic growth and increasing government intervention, export-led growth, and deregulation. Indeed, the economy grew rapidly and brought some improvements in its social development. Unfortunately, due to his dictatorial and authoritarian power, there were many people have become powerless, frustrated, and less respect to the government.

On the other hand, a revolution started by minor or poor people who were recognized to be powerless. For instance, many student activists among universities in Indonesia united to protect and ask for Soeharto resignation. The latest example is the story about a young schoolgirl from Pakistan who stood up to the Taliban, Malala Yousafzai. She was shot in the head by Taliban due to her struggle against them to defend her right to an education.

In conclusion, I do not think that individuals are incapable of bringing influences and create changes among society. I personally believe that individuals, like governments and organizations, are also part of society. Therefore, both individuals and governments or organizations can do something to change society in their own role.

Votes
Average: 9.3 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...of former President Soeharto, there was a large number of changes and developments especially eco...
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...to the government. On the other hand, a revolution started by minor or poor pe...
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...ng to change society in their own role.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276470588235 0.247107548796 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.135294117647 0.15552993741 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0970588235294 0.0946569551029 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0411764705882 0.0501201869031 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0441176470588 0.0437536398559 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102941176471 0.122223957237 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0323529411765 0.0403219363162 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.31513546525 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0441176470588 0.0326786765898 135% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0588235294118 0.0861751148067 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00294117647059 0.0214082191602 14% => More modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00882352941176 0.0119246538136 74% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1996.0 1933.38276553 103% => OK
No of words: 299.0 316.052104208 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.65333333333 6.10592293882 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20519365927 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.428093645485 0.37474360046 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.361204013378 0.284197041944 127% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.270903010033 0.203843217982 133% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.210702341137 0.137313986986 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31513546525 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591973244147 0.560935902166 106% => OK
Word variations: 64.7871419173 60.7401812628 107% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0911823647 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6875 20.7725350517 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.9736183126 49.5273876611 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentences varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.384126984 93.4120437189 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1873015873 15.2821509519 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.457142857143 0.594174754866 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01102204409 80% => OK
Readability: 54.8079013378 49.1922392462 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.86666666667 1.69127372897 110% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.279709490839 0.332604825255 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101438096753 0.102734651613 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0802991649379 0.0668474354756 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.531365360532 0.534917948617 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0909847142351 0.148666948902 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109224310967 0.13441755203 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742973051473 0.0742828286743 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.249173771161 0.324241079732 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.11807548294 0.0640056729886 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193639935093 0.22793763319 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691552965046 0.0582452615562 119% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41883767535 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.88977955912 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.60220440882 115% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.00200400802 150% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.493987976 124% => OK

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Some grammar issues. Read a good grammar book.
Rates: 66.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 6.0 Out of 9