one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Medical care is important to the citizens of a country as it is related to the issue of whether people can live longer. Every year government spends a proportion of its revenue on medical care. The purpose of doing this is to conduct empirical research on the vaccines and medication that can wipe out as much diseases as possible. It is no doubt that spending money on medical care is essential as people can live in a immunised society. There are many advantages brought by the improvement in medical care and these advantages can outweigh the disadvantages.

By improving the medical care, a c...

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Votes
Average: 8 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...nes and medication that can wipe out as much diseases as possible. It is no doubt th...
^^^^
Line 1, column 420, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...care is essential as people can live in a immunised society. There are many advan...
^
Line 2, column 205, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...le lives. The reason of the death cases is because the medical personnel does not anticipa...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 533, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... devoted to the government for spending some of the public money on medical care. The oth...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['if', 'so', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'no doubt', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259708737864 0.247107548796 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.162621359223 0.15552993741 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101941747573 0.0946569551029 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0339805825243 0.0501201869031 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00970873786408 0.0437536398559 22% => More pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.121359223301 0.122223957237 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0364077669903 0.0403219363162 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62372627859 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0291262135922 0.0326786765898 89% => OK
Particles: 0.00242718446602 0.00163938923432 148% => OK
Determiners: 0.128640776699 0.0861751148067 149% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0291262135922 0.0214082191602 136% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0145631067961 0.0119246538136 122% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2229.0 1933.38276553 115% => OK
No of words: 382.0 316.052104208 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81984334204 6.10592293882 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.20519365927 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340314136126 0.37474360046 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.274869109948 0.284197041944 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180628272251 0.203843217982 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109947643979 0.137313986986 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62372627859 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48167539267 0.560935902166 86% => OK
Word variations: 51.305122635 60.7401812628 84% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0911823647 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.3636363636 20.7725350517 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4337880268 49.5273876611 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.381188119 93.4120437189 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.801980198 15.2821509519 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.326732673267 0.594174754866 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.39078156313 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01102204409 80% => OK
Readability: 44.8505473584 49.1922392462 91% => OK
Elegance: 2.02352941176 1.69127372897 120% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.545032404246 0.332604825255 164% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.133586804299 0.102734651613 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0897802093643 0.0668474354756 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.535224756532 0.534917948617 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146186699571 0.148666948902 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209279704898 0.13441755203 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126406492477 0.0742828286743 170% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.325932426582 0.324241079732 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.141100331954 0.0640056729886 220% => No connections among paragraphs
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.363549268407 0.22793763319 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914752084328 0.0582452615562 157% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41883767535 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.88977955912 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.60220440882 231% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.00200400802 50% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.493987976 133% => OK

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.5 Out of 9