You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are n

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Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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At the present time, one of the problems of society is the increasing crime rate among teenagers. Some people who studied human behavior believe that the primary reason behind this are the parents and teachers who said to be not proving enough attention to the needs of children. In my opinion, parents should be the first person to be blamed. However, there are also other contributing factor from the environment that makes juvenile delinquency even worse.

Most teenagers commit crime to capture the attention of their parents. As everyone is aware, parents nowadays are both busy outside home. However, parents are working hard to support the needs of their children and give their children a better future ahead of them. It seems that child's need does not depend on the material things, but they are longing more for the love and time of their parents. This proves that parents are the primary reason why children are doing immoral acts and that they should take full responsibility of their children.

But what makes the problem even worse is the influence these youngsters are getting from the environment surrounding them. This is the stage of life of a teenager where in they are meeting different kind of people. If these people happen to be friends with an offender, it is likely that they will commit the same mistakes as them. Most teenagers are following the same actions of their friends as what the saying goes, "birds with the same feather flocks together". Society should not take the social forces lightly as this can greatly encourage individual to commit acts that are offensive.

Having said that, since children are parents' responsibility. It is only right that parents should take full accountability of their children's action, but we should not avoid the influence they acquire from other people in their environment.

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the primary reason behind this are the parents and teachers
the primary reasons behind this are the parents and teachers

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Need to talk about teachers too. '...they need from parents and teachers.'

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