16. Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-years-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think crime is determined by human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?
It has been discussed recently that scientists can predict if three-year-old children will conduct crimes in the future by observing and analysing their behaviours now. From my perspective, I don’t think the results are reliable and I believe that there are various steps adults and the government can take to prevent children from being criminals.
To begin with, I disagree that people are born with evil. For me, the family environment and the society where children grow up have more impact on their personal development rather than human nature. When children have been raised with parents who have alcohol or drug problems, they are highly possible to be abused or neglected. They may look different or even ‘weird’ to their peers because of the family background and have suffered from unfair treatment from society, which is the most well-known reason to be a criminal. The tragic personal experience of children has a bigger influence on whether they will become anti-social and do the wrong things when they are grown-ups.
Accordingly, I argue that the government can take actions to lower the future criminal rate. Organizations like Child Protection can give more assistance to children who are under risk. Social workers can be employed to interfere with family issues. Furthermore, education should be highly valued where teachers, with their professional knowledge, guide parents and children to lead a brighter life. Subjects like mental health should be included in the schooling system in order to help children to be more independent and resilient. All the movements will have a positive impact on young children’s life.
In conclusion, children are born like a blank paper, and their family and society play an important role in their development. There will be fewer criminals in the following decades if the government can do the right things to help the young generation now.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, furthermore, if, look, may, so, well, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25081433225 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78903837422 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5667752443 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3392468888 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.466666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295026958918 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091358852523 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515128787452 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176866409979 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479587213139 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, furthermore, if, look, may, so, well, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25081433225 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78903837422 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5667752443 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3392468888 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.466666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295026958918 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091358852523 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515128787452 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176866409979 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479587213139 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.