For all children the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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For all children, the ability to play a musical instrument is just as important as the ability to read and write.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is widely believed that the ability to play musical instruments is equally significant as reading and writing skills. I personally do not share similar point of view with the statement with the reasons explained below.

First of all, the idea that possessing an ability to play musical tools, such as guitar is equally important as the ability to read and write is unacceptable because this skill do not influence the future learning process of the children. Children who do not have skill in playing musical instruments are still having an excellent opportunity to experience a better learning process when they attend schools or universities since they have mastered the most basic skills required in the learning process. Thus, to say that mastering music instruments is equally important to reading and writing skills is a false claim.

Secondly, an opportunity to learn how to play musical instruments, such as violin may not be given to everyone. To attend music schools, parents have to pay great amount of money because the tuition fees of these schools are really expensive and this makes the schools unaffordable for many families. In Indonesia, for instance, only a small minority of families are able to send their children to music schools and generally, they come from wealthy families. Therefore, saying that this skill as compulsory as writing and reading skills for children is not unacceptable.

To sum up, I firmly believe that an ability to play musical tools is not a must for children as for reading and writing skills.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1301.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10196078431 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72636747061 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517647058824 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3548552523 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.1 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377119492138 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167332945196 0.084324248473 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103005288336 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253957428196 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504907133714 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments