Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is?What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?
Art has been playing an integral part in people’s lives around the world. But people are now increasingly turning their attention towards practical subjects such as science, technology and business. This could be attributed to a range of reasons and a number of measures could be taken to promote people’s affection in arts.
One main reason why people are enticed to technical and business sectors is that it is easier for a person to find a job with higher salaries and clearer prospects in these sectors compared to arts. Since the world are now in the midst of a revolution in technologies and international commerce, there is a immense demand for employees working in these areas. Therefore those who are operating in such industries are more likely to have a stable job that provides enough money for them and their families to live a happy life. In contrast, arts entail some inherent risks in terms of career progression and stability. On top of that, some certain forms of art such as painting or acting require special skills and talents that only suits a small number of people. Consequently, many people would choose STEM and business subjects rather than arts.
To foster an interest in arts in people, governments could invest in campaigns to raise public awareness of arts. For example, sponsored art exhibitions are a good way to cultivate a passion for arts in people and thus create a favorable environment for arts to grow. Another measure is for the authorities to grant subsidies for artists so that financial difficulties are no longer a burden for those who choose to work in art sector. Finally, music or painting should be made compulsory subjects at school to encourage people to pursue art when they are young.
In conclusion, while science, technology and business are gaining public’s concerns, governments should undertake some aforementioned steps to stimulate people’s preference to arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13836477987 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90584415003 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591194968553 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5917912061 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.714285714 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227449675711 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814925555236 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466959968335 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140526724206 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708008592705 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.