Because of the pressure of new subject such as business studies, many schools have dropped sport or physical education (PE) from the curriculum. How important is sport or PE in a young person’s education?
Most important to prepare student for work or continue their study. Government should give more attention to this program, enter program to learn obligatory. Prime function this program is help student has private and social problem connect with education. Make physical education program easy to follow by student. Included sport for example. Sport in school only to complete curriculum, finally student has assume if sport like play game without know about sport benefit of sport. Enter sport to PE program will help student to make their personality better. Now, almost student has communication around television, computer, hand phone and expensive facility which has negative aspect to their growth. For example, many student spend of time with hand phone or tab, make conversation or play the game without care about other people moreover out of control by self and make big problem.
Government should enter sport to PE program and available many facility and equipment to support this program and finally, sport program two times for a week, aerobic, run, walk, swimming for example. Commonly, PE program only solve problem about privacy problem but did not explain how about to make personality be better. PE program can prevent student to make a mistake in their live. Abusive behavior, crime case for example. Now, almost parents give expensive facility without know negative aspect to children’s growth.
In conclusion, PE program in school not only to curriculum but can help teacher and parents to know about their children growth and build good personality when they are young. The result will student happy, healthy and more productive in class.
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Essay evaluation report
Prime function this program is help student
Prime function of this program is to help student
Sentence: Sport in school only to complete curriculum, finally student has assume if sport like play game without know about sport benefit of sport.
Description: A verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to has and assume
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to without and know
many student spend of time with hand phone or tab,
many students spend time with hand phones or tabs,
Sentence: Now, almost parents give expensive facility without know negative aspect to children's growth.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to without and know
Sentence: In conclusion, PE program in school not only to curriculum but can help teacher and parents to know about their children growth and build good personality when they are young.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and growth
Sentence: The result will student happy, healthy and more productive in class.
Description: The fragment student happy , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace happy with adverb
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to will and student
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1362 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.14 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.474 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
...omplete curriculum, finally student has assume if sport like play game without know ab...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 719, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...ve aspect to their growth. For example, many student spend of time with hand phone or tab, m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun facility seems to be countable; consider using: 'many facilities'.
Suggestion: many facilities
...enter sport to PE program and available many facility and equipment to support this program a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... negative aspect to children’s growth. In conclusion, PE program in school not ...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.332214765101 0.247107183377 134% => OK
Verbs: 0.137583892617 0.155533422707 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872483221477 0.0946595960268 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0536912751678 0.0501214627716 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0201342281879 0.0437548338989 46% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10067114094 0.122226691241 82% => OK
Participles: 0.00671140939597 0.0403226058552 17% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.46518225117 2.80594681477 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0503355704698 0.0326793684256 154% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0234899328859 0.0861772015684 27% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0201342281879 0.021408717616 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010067114094 0.011925033212 84% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1672.0 1933.35771543 86% => OK
No of words: 265.0 316.048096192 84% => OK
Chars per words: 6.30943396226 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20517956788 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.418867924528 0.374742101984 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.343396226415 0.28420135186 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177358490566 0.203846283523 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0943396226415 0.137316102897 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46518225117 2.80594681477 88% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.037074148 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535849056604 0.56093040696 96% => OK
Word variations: 52.6416096594 60.7387585426 87% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5625 20.7743622355 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5290371346 49.517814964 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 127.492653851 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5625 20.7743622355 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4375 0.814263465372 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38877755511 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 50.9021226415 49.1944974215 103% => OK
Elegance: 2.07936507937 1.69124875643 123% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177271832098 0.332605444948 53% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113583667261 0.102741220458 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0813767876946 0.0668466124924 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.44354111205 0.534860350844 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150566769361 0.148594505496 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680336850769 0.134430193775 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513661520954 0.0742795772207 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.429470203867 0.324371583561 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0885469653282 0.0638462369009 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127236173054 0.228012699653 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451175312703 0.058150111329 78% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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