Being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
being. in the public eye such as a famous movie star or premiership footballer has its advantages as well disadvantages. it can be argued that the benefits outweighs its drawbacks. this essay will outline the benefits and the problems. also my position on this will be stated.
On the one hand, famous people acquire wealth suddenly which gives them financial freedom. For instance, English premiership footballers earn on average well above £2,000 per week which accumulates to a lot of money in a year. this gives them the opportunity to buy whatever they desire such as super cars, living in a luxury mansion and also living a flamboyant lifestyle. Furthermore, they are able to look after themselves and their loved ones throughout their life time. that is to say whenever they choose to retire from active football they will be secured financially.
On the other hand, being an A-lister also has its drawbacks. The general public pays so much attention to celebrities which reaps them off their privacy. For example, Michael Jackson in his lifetime got so much attention, that he decided to change how he looked. he ended up not satisfied and he was depressed which some argued contributed to his untimely death. he could have given up his wealth and return to normalcy like some people did in the past, which perhaps could have given him the happiness he sought for.
In conclusion, being a celebrity bring problems and benefits but however I think the benefits of being in the public eye outweighs it problems as I have discussed in this essay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1298.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66402891236 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594696969697 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9470976785 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5333333333 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.73333333333 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191058185399 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644494203881 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940339317719 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156878632841 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141789144505 0.056905535591 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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