Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Many people believe that being famous such as popular movie star or sports personality brings about negativity and positivity. it can be argued that the benefits outweighs the drawbacks.
To begin, there is no doubt that fame brings great opportunities. this, gives celebrities the chance to become wealthy overnight. For example, footballers earn a lot of money per week which sums up to large figures yearly. Thus, they are able to buy expensive super cars, live in a luxury mansion and go to places they desire for holidays and perhaps lodge in 5 star hotels. Their future and that of their family members will be secured even if they decide on early retirement. In addition, fame will always earn them respect and pave ways for them in life.
Nevertheless, being famous is beneficial but not without it down sides. A listers are known to lack privacy, as the public eye pry on every single thing they do which can sometimes lead to undesirable effects. In my country, there is a very popular artist known as Kish who shot to fame as a result of winning one of the numerous talent shows. Prior to this he was not known but was happy in himself and later became obsessed with wearing highly priced jewelries and everybody wanted a slice of him. it got too much for him and he became depressed due to lack of privacy, he went into gambling and lost his hard earned possession. Furthermore, this was unbearable for him and he took his own life. His death could have been prevented if the public were not prying unnecessarily in his private affairs.
In Conclusion, being a celebrity without a doubt brings some benefits as well as problems. However, I think the positive side outweighs the negative as discussed in this essay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73509933775 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56592393019 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635761589404 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4232188854 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1176470588 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185035174013 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625825400411 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886991513088 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155293979717 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107308146933 0.056905535591 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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