Both governments and individuals are spending vast amounts of money protecting animals and their habitat. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issue in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?
The issue of whether animals and their habitats or social issues such as health care and poverty should receive financial support from the government and citizens is certainly a contentious one. While many people think that it is better to pour money on solving critical issues, I personally believe that both of the problems should be spent on.
There are reasons why we should take measures to save wildlife by financial aid. Firstly, every species play a vital role in balancing the natural ecosystem and significantly contribute to the food chain. This means, by taking steps to preserve animals, especially endangered ones, we can not just maintain biodiversity but also prevent food chain disorder and animals from extinction. Secondly, it is widely believe that human can benefit lots of things from the nature. For instance, crocodiles are being used in many countries for the purpose of predicting weather pattern, therefore, people can manage to deal with natural disasters before it threatens their lives.
On the other hand, social issues such as education and health care system should also receive fair amounts of funding from nations and individuals for some reasons. First, hardly can the world be developed without the contribution of education. In fact, without providing enough education, many countries are now confronting with the rise in crime rate and that their population, especially those who do not acquire essential knowledge about the environment, are putting animals at great risk of extinction. For instance, Indian hunts for rhino’s horns as they belive that it can be used to cure illness. Secondly, in order to increase living condition, it is beneficial for people to invest money in health care system. Thus, in case of epidemic outbreak, we can protect ourself from being attacked by any viruses.
To conclude, both animal and human life are equally important so they should receive acceptable amount of money from government and inhabitants.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26813880126 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67379887239 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608832807571 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4262844966 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.285714286 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245849551281 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747118305981 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662476511413 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161547234294 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785515359441 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.