Children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe that children should be free to do what they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people believe that arranged activities are suitable for children in their spare time, however, I agree with the point of view that children should be free to do whatever they want.
First of all, organized activities have some benefits for children such as opportunities to meet and make more friends in those events. With the foundation of large networking from early ages, it will be a powerful assistant to the child’s career when they turn mature. Moreover, participating in many extracurricular activities also enhances ability in communication, confidence and new knowledge for children. Besides many advantages, not many children volunteer or enjoy taking part in these activities. If parents force their offspring to join that kind of activity without agreement from them, that will be an annoyance and disrespect to the children.
According to liberalism, everyone is allowed to do anything they want, including children. When we stated the word “freetime”, most of us do understand that children have to get through the whole week of studying. Therefore, they deserve to be free to do the things they like: playing video games, sporting or reading comics. Although there are some activities which may harm the children, but, if those are under the parents' management, the children will know what is good and what is bad for themselves. The freedom to do what they prefer will become a reward to motivate the children to do well in studying.
In short, letting the children do what they want in their freetime is the basic respect to them, it makes children more independent. Even though they are free, they still have to be within the framework to direct them towards good deeds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, in short, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09642857143 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81305039966 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6849856609 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.769230769 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44561588854 0.244688304435 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160157471121 0.084324248473 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10769509107 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30487950965 0.151304729494 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108648453422 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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