In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The cutting edge technology and the increasing enhancement of the Internet have brought drastic transformations to the way people work or study. It is a common belief that schools and teachers will be the solution to improve the level of education in rural areas, some, however, claim that taking advantage of the modern inventions is a better alternative.
To begin with, one distinct disadvantage online platforms or the world wide web bring everyone, regardless of age, is the requirements in basic knowledge about computing literacy which many of those in rural areas find challenging to acquire. Computers skills such as universal keyboard commands, familiarity with fundamental hardware terminology or keeping personal data private should take city dwellers a nick of time to learn thanks to their frequent exposure to modern technology. Meanwhile, students with underprivileged backgrounds barely get used to such lifestyle, claiming trendy devices should be really expensive to afford and associated with a number of eye-related illnesses, short vision in particular.
Furthermore, the proper guidance and precise instructions from teachers at schools plays an indispensable role in every child's life. Taking formal high school or further education with the student-centered teaching method has been long well known for its efficiency in fostering children's creativity and interpersonal skills. When students invest a huge amount of time in class interacting with peers or instructors, their social networks could be significantly broadened since students themselves experience social environment including classroom-built live discussions or public presentations. Therefore, the young minds have more potentials to succeed in the future.
In conclusion, due to the obvious downsides if choosing to provide computers or Internet access to inhabitants of the rural community, I strongly favor the idea of letting teachers encourage students to have a strong commitment to education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'acquiring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: acquiring
...f those in rural areas find challenging to acquire. Computers skills such as universal key...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in particular, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80612244898 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24920384884 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.69387755102 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.1203010818 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.7 106.682146367 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137271262387 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495655943435 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346183167566 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855075327622 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337801826617 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 13.0946893788 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 50.2224549098 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.01 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.98 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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