In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is difficult for children in remote areas in some developing countries to access to educational systems. While some people believe that proving more schools and teachers is the good way to tackle this problem, I would agree that helping students in rural cities broaden their knowledge through using computers and the Internet should be top-priority.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why providing more schools and teachers is the good way to give students in the developing countries more chance to access to the educational environment. One reason is that there is a lack of the facilities for the demands of using schools to teach. If some remote communities build more schools for children, this will encourage them to go to schools. Furthermore, the building of facilities helps teachers in rural communities have a convenient environment for the transmission of knowledge. Students will be received a huge opportunity to go to schools as well as have a great environment to access a world of knowledge.
On the other hand, I believe that online learning is the most appropriate to solve the less access to education problems. In remote areas, the local children must help their parents make ends meet rather than spend all day to learning in the schools. There is evidence to support the idea that proving computers and the Internet to help children to study whenever they have spare time is more beneficial. Moreover, building more schools for children in developing countries costs a great deal of money. If the fund is not enough, children learning will be disturb.
In conclusion, although the option to helping students in developing countries access to education through providing more schools and teachers of helping students can approach online learning are advantageous in their own way, it seems to me that it is better to help people can study through the Internet.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07028753994 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80071996028 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450479233227 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2275942624 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.076923077 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329317106442 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11134787862 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516347455807 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198296055194 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346178580554 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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