Developing countries require help offered by international organizations to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aid is important. Others believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.
what kind of relief from rich countries should be given priority in terms of supporting developing countries? Some people think the best answer of this issue is simply money. others, however, hold an opposed view that other practical aids, instead of finance, are a sound decision. personally, I am in favor of the latter view, and I will explore possible reasons as below.
firstly, the common root problem of developing countries is the collapsed administration and economy systems, and their recovery seriously depends on the transfusing of external capital. firstly, financial aids allow a poor country to build up an effective government by paying salaries of governmental personnel without delay. With stable income, most officials would be satisfied and motivated to be fully in charge of social technical, executive and supervisory positions like courts of law, police stations, water and power supply departments and so forth, thus lifting the community out of street violence, crimes and living chaos. Besides, financial injection helps to restore the banking system, which means the availability of commercial loan with low interest for a large amount of companies eagerly needing money for material purchase, hiring workers and products manufacturing. Accordingly, what the capital input brings include vibrant industry and business, ever-increasing job opportunities and tax revenue for public welfare--in short, a booming social development on a right track.
Another reason for supporting financial aids is that money is always a favored kind of donation, because it gives recipients in poor countries a high flexibility to buy what they are really lack of. In fact, practical needs are always variable and unpredictable in different countries, people and times ,so that it is very likely that the common physical goods endowed from rich countries may not precisely suit demands of local regions. For example, as for vietnam which suffers from wars for decades, surprisingly, any type of food aid from foreign countries is undesirable , for the reason that the yield of grain produced in this poor country can not only fully feed its people, but also be more than enough for food export. In contrast, if vietnam were offered money directly, it will buy whatever it needs most from international markets, probably from public transportation to vaccines to school facilities. Therefore, straight money support is indispensable, its universal effectiveness is always superior over any other goods-based donation.
however, financial aids do not come without risks, and one of them is about their misuse. Obviously, in too many developing countries lacking democracy, public supervision, or accountability and transparency in government operation, there is a high possibility that the money might be appropriated for personal sake or even flow into the pocket of bureaucrats--corruption in short, expectedly. In addition, the most worrying aspect is that in poor countries in civil war, money will be misspent by warlords buying new weapons and bombs, instead of foodstuffs or medicines. Consequently, In cases above, the final application of financial support would depart from its initial charitable purpose, and it will make social poverty worse, not better.
Moreover, when it comes to healthy and sustainable growth, there are more to require for a poor country than just buying stuffs by money. Specifically, the acquirement of core factors that have lasting and fundamental impacts on the society, such as qualified teachers, doctors, lawyers and scientists, cannot be achieved by buying, but rather by systematic training and teaching. In other words, non-financial aids from developed countries are also necessary. For example, professional teams containing experts in all kinds of fields from science to medication, from law to social work, should be sent in poor countries for the purpose of educating their future talents. what is more, observers from rich countries should also join the running of local government, which ensures that all kinds of benefaction can be allocated to the public fairly.
In conclusion, financial aids are always needed as the first step for economy revival. To a larger extent, however, money is very limited and even risky, and other practical helps, especially the ones associated with human resources, should be introduced into poor countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, in short, kind of, such as, in other words, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 10.4138276553 269% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 41.998997996 217% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3738.0 1615.20841683 231% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 680.0 315.596192385 215% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49705882353 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10654576214 4.20363070211 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01118642532 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 388.0 176.041082164 220% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570588235294 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1133.1 506.74238477 224% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.878179713 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.52 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.88 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174637000461 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560609768429 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467379590377 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976566396149 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219387446074 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 211.0 78.4519038076 269% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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