Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
These days, discipline is an ever increasing problem in contemporary schools. Discipline is extremely important so that children are well behaved, have self control and not become a failure in society. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, whilst others think that this is the role of parents. It is the aim of this essay to present the roles of both parents and teachers and also share my opinion about the argument above.
First of all, I think one of the main duties of parents is to not spoil and pamper their child. Once a child is pampered, it is extremely hard to sculpt the child into a person with discipline. Therefore, parents need to be strict and show authority but also show their children some respect so that they are not intimidated by their parents. Parents should also become a role model and show some discipline to their children for example by obeying traffic rules and so on. Furthermore, I think parents should educate their kids to be discipline by giving them chores and making sure they do them.
Secondly, the roles of teachers. Teachers should not only educate students academically but also educate them about discipline which is not emphasised in the curriculum. Teachers should show them the consequences of not being discipline and also inspire them to become a better person by telling them real-life success stories. Teachers should also punish students for their wrong doings such as not doing their homework, not obeying school rules and many more. Teachers should also monitor students behaviours on a daily basis. If one of the students does not show any signs of discipline, it is mandatory to give the student one on one counselling so that that student can be advised.
To sum it all up, parents cannot control their kids in school whilst teachers cannot educate students at home. In my opinion, both sides are equally important in instilling the virtue which is discipline into children. Lack of proper parental and school discipline brings too much drawbacks to not just them but the society. I hope that both sides join forces and not argue who has the larger responsibility to raise children that are disciplined.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Pay attention to the structure of sentences. Don't repeat same structures all the time, look:
Teachers should not only educate students academically but also educate them about discipline which is not emphasised in the curriculum.
Teachers should show them the consequences of not being discipline and also inspire them to become a better person by telling them real-life success stories.
Teachers should also punish students for their wrong doings such as not doing their homework, not obeying school rules and many more.
Teachers should also monitor students behaviours on a daily basis.
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Don't repeat words, phrases and sentences, look:
Teachers should not only educate students academically but also educate them ...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.833 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.555 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...telling them real-life success stories. Teachers should also punish students for their w...
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...not obeying school rules and many more. Teachers should also monitor students behaviours...
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Line 5, column 688, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing so that that student can be advised. To sum it all up, parents cannot control...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...rental and school discipline brings too much drawbacks to not just them but the soci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, i think, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95956873315 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63658432985 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6748244767 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.222222222 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311108225524 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11623997116 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131206069444 0.0667982634062 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221848670718 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164879011505 0.056905535591 290% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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