The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school To what extent do you agree with this statement and why

Essay topics:

"The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school". To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

Some people think that what we get from our family's education is more essential than the one we get from school. In my opinion, I partially agree because parents show their children moral behaviour and responsibilities whereas teachers cover only academic subjects.
First of all, what we learn from your family affects considerably to how we behave outside the social. If we are well-educated, we will become a beloved person. A well-educated person is the one who is well-mannered with the elderly, with friends or people in general, such as: help the elderly cross the road, know to say "sorry" when having faults, know to say "thank you" when being helped. Contrary to this, if we do not get good education from our family, we will be spoiled day by day. We behave badly with people around us, use violence to solve problems and many more.
On the other hand, the education we get from school is also necessary. From school, we will get knowledge from various fields like: Mathematics, Physics, Literature,... Standard of living is getting higher and higher, which demands people to have a range knowledge to work, to live and there is no doubt that school is the best choice to comprehend knowledge. If we do not have it, we nearly cannot do anything.
In conclusion, I believe that what we learn from our parents cannot be denied but besides that, school's education is indispensable to maturity.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...s like: Mathematics, Physics, Literature,... Standard of living is getting higher ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, in general, no doubt, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9375 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89047465825 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0938573583 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241845345987 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959263839525 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677855076816 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157804212399 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212967915744 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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