An effective health care system should encourage people to take preventive measures against illness and disease, rather than encourage them to rely on treatment. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
These days, health care institutions are thought to be the only places where people can find the antidote for their illnesses, as they provide a detailed examination and medication. However, some people oppose this idea and consider that the effectiveness of health systems should deal with the patient's willpower rather than create an addict for treatments.
On one hand, recent studies show that the mind is the healing tool in many diseases. Once told by someone we rely on that we are cured, we will start feeling healthy again. Therefore, as they have authority and credibility to the public, the healthcare systems should mould their patient to believe that pills and other drugs are not the only way of recovery. Thus, the immune system of the ill people will strengthen because it fights against the disease, and we will save considerable amounts of money. Moreover, we would not have to face crowded clinics as only the cases in acute or terminal conditions will be brought there.
On the other hand, having too much faith in self-healing and prevention could have a negative outcome for the medical world, but also yourself.
People could develop a carelessness for anything that refers to this domain. Hence, they will postpone a clinic examination due to the placebo effect and the so-believed results of an unprescribed treatment. Their state will worse until the moment neither pills nor surgery can save their life.
In conclusion, I believe that an effective health care system should encourage people to take preventive measures instead of relying on treatments, as these are pure chemicals and could put the patients' lives at risk. Nevertheless, doctors should also recommend an examination from an expert from time to time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
... of health systems should deal with the patients willpower rather than create an addict ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13636363636 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65837530543 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611888111888 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7078617181 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24826168404 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782669748585 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925738860411 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128641025577 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0952714803521 0.056905535591 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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