The author of this topic makes an assertion that some high risk games such as sky diving and skiing should be banned due to there risk factors. While some may argue that this assertion holds true for all the cases, other may counter this assertion by providing example of different sports. In this essay, I will highlight both these sides and try to provide sound reasoning for my claims.
On one hand, this assertion seems probable. The main reason behind this, is the impact of the injuries during these dangerous sports. In other words, these kind of sports always associated with high risk of permanent injuries. Children and young adults always want to play these sports because of the thriil, which is offered by these risky games. However, they do not understand the impact, which can taken place after any kind of accidents during these sports. For instance, according to the latest data from Nepal Sky Diving team, approximately 18 children suffered from a unexpected heart attack during sky diving every year. In addition, the next these kind of sports often encourage some older person to prove their daring attitudes. In other words, some overly people take the opportunity through these risky sports in order to challenge young generation. As old people always underestimated by the young generation, because of their clumsy attitude, old people want to prove their existence towards the young people. For example, as per the recent poll in facebook, 26 old people out of 100 wanted to take take part in the GOA Sky Diving Festival. In short, not only these sports can affect our body after injuries, but also it promotes human zeal in a wrong way. Thus, these sports should be banned.
In the other hand, what is life without taking a risk. In other words, in every field we have to take risk to become a successful individual. So, why not we can take part in some dangerous sports like skiing or sky diving. For example, although we can not predict the future job opportunities, we always take those subjects in which we have an interest. This is one kind of risk in life. Yet, we are ready to take this risk because we love the subject. So similarly we can take part in these dangerous sports and we can enjoy our life, which way we like it the most. Additionally, we can not predict the accident before it happened. This kind of mishap can happen anywhere, such as roads , railways. For instance, in one research paper published by U.S Sports Ministry it was claimed that more than 25 people died every year in an road accident compared to sports accident. For these reasons, these kind of sports should not be banned.
To conclude, it can be reiterated that we have to face dangerous situation in our everyday's life so it is not required to ban such kind of risky games in order to prevent some accidents. However, these kind of sports should be performed under supervision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...rtion that some high risk games such as sky diving and skiing should be banned due to ther...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...these dangerous sports. In other words, these kind of sports always associated with high r...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'take' or 'be taken'?
Suggestion: take; be taken
...do not understand the impact, which can taken place after any kind of accidents durin...
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Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: Skydiving
...according to the latest data from Nepal Sky Diving team, approximately 18 children suffere...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...approximately 18 children suffered from a unexpected heart attack during sky divi...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...d from a unexpected heart attack during sky diving every year. In addition, the next these...
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Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...iving every year. In addition, the next these kind of sports often encourage some older pe...
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Line 3, column 1110, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: take
...ook, 26 old people out of 100 wanted to take take part in the GOA Sky Diving Festival. In...
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Line 3, column 1136, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: Skydiving
...100 wanted to take take part in the GOA Sky Diving Festival. In short, not only these spor...
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Line 3, column 1257, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...juries, but also it promotes human zeal in a wrong way. Thus, these sports should be banned. ...
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Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...in some dangerous sports like skiing or sky diving. For example, although we can not predi...
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Line 5, column 688, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ishap can happen anywhere, such as roads , railways. For instance, in one research...
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...e, in one research paper published by U.S Sports Ministry it was claimed that mor...
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Suggestion: a
... more than 25 people died every year in an road accident compared to sports accide...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
...ry year in an road accident compared to sports accident. For these reasons, these kind...
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Line 5, column 894, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... to sports accident. For these reasons, these kind of sports should not be banned. To c...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...der to prevent some accidents. However, these kind of sports should be performed under sup...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, similarly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in short, kind of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 1615.20841683 148% => OK
No of words: 504.0 315.596192385 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75595238095 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41742360147 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484126984127 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7692275168 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6071428571 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96428571429 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19587066649 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650664205999 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586657608714 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132450225302 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120490160885 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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