In recent years, so-called extreme sports have drawn public attention in many countries. It is said that these are too dangerous to play and should be prohibited. While I agree with their potential fatality, I argue that it is not necessary to enact a law to stop these activities.
Without a doubt, extreme sports can put people’s lives at risk. Obviously, taking part in these sports may lead participants to be in danger. Some of them have to suffer severe injuries such as broken limbs or brain damage, even die a painful death. Furthermore, it also brings risks to spectators as well as rescue workers. The fact has shown that it may endanger people staying in a grandstand because of unfortunate events or athletes’ carelessness. Apart from that, in emergency cases, skiers stuck in a snowstorm, for example, rescuers, who have the responsibility to save skiers’ lives, may also get fatal accidents. Therefore, it is undeniable that playing extreme sports involves varying degrees of danger.
Despite the mentioned-above concerns, I hold the belief that authorities should not ban these sports because of some following reasons. The first one is that players can gain a lot from these sporting activities. It is a suitable way for them to have an enjoyable pastime with friends. Moreover, they have opportunities to learn problem-solving and decision-making skills under dangerous conditions. The second reason is that almost all extreme sports have safety rules to prevent participants from unforeseen problems. Anyone who wants to join these kinds of sports needs to sign up a training course to have basic practices. Besides, all of the neophytes are not allowed to play solo and must be accompanied by an experienced professional. As a result, it would be wrong to ban extreme sports.
In conclusion, although the potential risks from extreme sports are clear, I do believe that rather than banning them, governments should invest in improving these sports’ facilities to ensure the safety for both players and spectators as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ourse to have basic practices. Besides, all of the neophytes are not allowed to play solo ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18072289157 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98854079892 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599397590361 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3238145664 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5263157895 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4736842105 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188493423291 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582957933043 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383259815543 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122590329312 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194938364753 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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