In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have different views about what decisions about the form of studying will benefit students. While there are some benefits of learning with modern technology at home, I would argue that it is better for people to attend schools.
It is apparent that there are some positive sides of studying with support of machinery. First of all, students can easily search documents on the Internet, while, at school, they do not allow to use computer or phone. For example, there are a numerous online courses where undergraduates are helped by subject specialist and be given necessary documents after lessons. Secondly, some students will save a huge amount of time, especially, when they are far from school. Therefore, it’s a more flexible way of studying that pupils won’t lack of lessons.
On the other hand, the primary thing is that people should go to traditional schools. First and foremost, schools do not only teach basic education but also life skills such as communication, confidence, presentation …Consequently, undergraduates are developed completely and be opened the door to new horizons. The other advantage is opportunities for career in the future. Students will be gained qualify for job when graduating. Many well-conditioned company always look at the certification to accept an employee.
In conclusion, while studying at home is a convenient way for some people, I do believe that they also take part in traditional schools to have a better future.
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...ommunication, confidence, presentation …Consequently, undergraduates are developed completel...
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...tional schools to have a better future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 237.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29957805907 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03376994533 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628691983122 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.90871741 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6153846154 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2307692308 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241460394522 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075405226908 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561147114818 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151460774334 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443132331297 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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