The government should spend money in promoting sports and art in school, rather than sponsoring professional sports and arts events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is a contention that the budget spent on professional sports and art events should be replaced to invest school education of sports and art. I completely agree with this idea.
On the one hand, the industry of sports and art brings some benefits to our society. To be specific, it allows people who inherit physical and artistic talents to obtain employment in their advantageous area. Moreover, it also creates some economic values, enriches public free time and improves living standard of every citizen. However, the money invested in professional sports and art domain fails to discover more highly talented people which are the key to improve the artistic and physical average level of a country.
On the other hand, increasing educational fund on sports and art events enhances the public physical and artistic strength as a whole. It has been centuries for human being to sort out people with talents in different area by teaching these subjects at school. So it should also work take effect in physical and art education. For example, America, whose average basketball level is above the rest of countries, implements a series of projects and elevation procedure to provide abundant resources and make sure every pupil in schools has the access to become a professional basketball player, as long as he/she owns enough talents. Therefore, taxpayers’ money should be allocated to schooling namely scholarships, completing infrastructure and hiring professional consultants in educational facilities.
In conclusion, although profession sports and art events have some positive influence on the whole society, the financial aid in sports and art education is an effective and practical approach to secure the development of public sports and art.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38741721854 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84431689346 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559602649007 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9688409719 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.583333333 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27731698931 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122586660567 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949992010758 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209520453434 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845207170451 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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