Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Authorities should not need to provide care or support finance for senior citizens because it is each person's duty to plan for retirement and self-supporting. Although i agree that personal welfare should be an individual's responsibility, i also disagree with the point of view that government should not support money for elderly people.
There are several reason why i disagree with this notion. Firstly, some old people who are poor or live alone, they do not have any children, so they cannot rely upon anyone. Secondly, the cost of living are rising day by day and older people are too weak to have any ability to work, this may lead to the fact that those senior citizens are not able to pay for their life's needs. Thirdly, nowadays, many of elderly people have to suffer from a great deal of disease, namely: heart attack, cancer, zona and many other diseases that really hard to treat, that is why they need help to afford the cost of treatment. Finally, i think it is goverment's role to support older people as they have been paying taxes throughout their life and for this reason, old people have the right to take the money back when they need.
On the other hand, many old citizens succeeded from their work, therefore, they have enough money to pay for matters that they need. Besides, there are many more elderly people do not need financial support from the authorities, such as those who have children and are taken care by them. In terms of economic perspective, if every senior people was received monetary provide, this would result in a financial burden on government's shoulder. Furthermore, many people believe that it is more important for authorities to invest money on education and healthcare rather than elderly people.
In conclusion, government should take responsibility of financial support to senior citizens and at the same time, it is individual's responsibility to save money for his or her future

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90243902439 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62093003369 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52743902439 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1556590056 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0833333333 7.06120827912 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377808478031 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146570527385 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894574068434 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254441858155 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997074076833 0.056905535591 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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