IELTS 6 Test 2 Writing Task 2 - Academic
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
In recent years, due to people and government’s growing interest of sports, many sport professionals are now enjoying the reputation and incomes as much as those singers and movie actors, or even more. However, not all people agree that it is justified for other professionals, which are also claimed to be equally important. I would discuss both sides in the following, and provide my personal opinion afterwards.
It may be true that sports professionals are paid much higher than other professionals. There is a research conducted lately on the top 10 income jobs in the world, and it turns out soccer player is at top of the list. Unlike the other occupations, there are some critical features in sports playing that differ from other jobs significantly. Above all, the training required to be sport professional are extremely hard, where tons of time and energy spent in. Unfortunately audience may not be able to see how hard the sportsman are being trained on the TV screen, but only their glories moment in winning the competitions. Also, some sports may lead to lifelong injuries to the player that they have to retire earlier than other occupation workers. Last but not least, should the sports player wining an international competition, it will bring reputation and proud to its countries and people. With all these considerations, it makes sense to reward the sportsman with high compensation than other occupations.
However, we shall also think about those who work very hard and contribute to the society in a less direct but equally important way. Take sanitation worker for example. Without their work, our public environment will be unbearable, and even harmful for citizens to live. Other examples include construction workers and farmers, who make home to protect us, and food to keep us alive. Yet, all their contributions are being neglected by the society, and their payment are far behind from sport professionals.
In my opinion, the income shall be different to reflect people’s effort. By looking to sports man’s earnings by the contrast of other important occupations does not make any difference to improve the unjustified situation. The government should make sure those who contribute equally to society deserve a better payment, and everyone of us should try to understand these people’s hard work and pay them the respect they deserve. The more value we see from other occupations, the more justified compensation will be provided to them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
... sides in the following, and provide my personal opinion afterwards. It may be true that spor...
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Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...workers. Last but not least, should the sports player wining an international competit...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
... reflect people’s effort. By looking to sports man’s earnings by the contrast of other...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216035634744 0.247107183377 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.155902004454 0.155533422707 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.11135857461 0.0946595960268 118% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0534521158129 0.0501214627716 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0512249443207 0.0437548338989 117% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0890868596882 0.122226691241 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0378619153675 0.0403226058552 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.90335772508 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0423162583519 0.0326793684256 129% => OK
Particles: 0.0022271714922 0.00163938923432 136% => OK
Determiners: 0.0846325167038 0.0861772015684 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0267260579065 0.021408717616 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0133630289532 0.011925033212 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2491.0 1933.35771543 129% => OK
No of words: 404.0 316.048096192 128% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16584158416 6.12580529183 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20517956788 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.358910891089 0.374742101984 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272277227723 0.28420135186 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188118811881 0.203846283523 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123762376238 0.137316102897 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90335772508 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.037074148 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576732673267 0.56093040696 103% => OK
Word variations: 68.3974621716 60.7387585426 113% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0891783567 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2 20.7743622355 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8083753847 49.517814964 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.55 127.492653851 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7743622355 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.45 0.814263465372 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 47.4277227723 49.1944974215 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.31623931624 1.69124875643 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193352543774 0.332605444948 58% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0597138388883 0.102741220458 58% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0417948735526 0.0668466124924 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473845232996 0.534860350844 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.112767510224 0.148594505496 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076881714842 0.134430193775 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438148310247 0.0742795772207 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.343411978574 0.324371583561 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0306433301539 0.0638462369009 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14495570398 0.228012699653 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577369806316 0.058150111329 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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