It is widely believed that the number of senior people will solely outnumber that of the young generation worldwide in the future. From my perspective, this phenomenon will exert a negative impact and pose a serious threat to the improvement of society as a whole. This essay will first give a plausible explanation, and then talk about its impacts on the human race.
First of all, the situation in which an increase in the number of elderly citizens compared to the youth will put heavy pressure on the government budget. This is because senior generation not only retires from the laboring workforce, but also being paid for their pension annually by the governments, which reduces the finance for other aspects of life. For example, the retired community in Vietnam has been receiving monthly pension since 2014, exerting a reduction in the total national budget.
Furthermore, this phenomenon has been a burden for the young generation recently, due to the fact that the youth has a huge responsibility to provide finance for their families, and therefore, literally no one at home to take care of their grandparents. For instance, Japanese housewives are usually responsible for the housework and caring for their children as well as their grandparents, while their husbands are the breadwinners, and thus these women can not pursue their own careers.
In conclusion, the phenomenon of the aging population generally has been causing some bad impacts on the development of a community, which is a financial burden for their governments and their children.
In some nations, like China…
In some nations, like China and other developing countries, the average life expectancy trend shows that the percentage of elderly citizens will rise as compared to young citizens. An increasing number of old people in a country should be a matter of concern for the government as it restricts economic growth and puts a burden on the health care infrastructure.
The main factor responsible for the development of any nation is always its young workforce, which means, the country with more youth always remains a step ahead of other nations in terms of capability to work. In the same way, the country with more elderly people is less likely to grow economically as it creates a supply shortage of qualified workers. Also, when the life expectancy of people increases, they are more likely to work for a longer period of time, and their retirement age increases, this creates job deficiency for the younger generation. In countries like Japan, for example, the average life expectancy is very high due to which the young workforce is comparatively very less. All these factors are highly responsible for lowering productivity and shrinking the workforce.
Secondly, as more people are ageing rapidly than ever before, it puts a burden on the health care system, in other words, better health care infrastructure and policies are required for the well-being of elderly people. All these facilities come with a cost that ensures that people can avail of medical facilities without any hassle. In some countries like North Korea, the government spends almost 10% of its GDP to introduce better health protection & pension schemes for the elderly. Such initiatives by the government authority, like allocating more money and resources to their health care systems, are imperative so that the medical needs of old people are fulfilled.
To conclude, in different countries, there is an increasing trend of average life expectancy which is considered as a negative development. It restricts not only the economic growth of the nation by depending on a small pool of young workers, but also puts an extra cost on the health care system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r their governments and their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19291338583 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8918682933 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586614173228 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7437238758 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.555555556 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2222222222 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.6666666667 7.06120827912 222% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.068935286791 0.244688304435 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368065682385 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424440817726 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0469398909213 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046075391906 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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