It is generally discussed among the public that extreme sports such as sky diving and rock climbing should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, an enormous amount of sports lovers participate in extreme sports; whilst, tragedies are frequently reported from the ultimate sports competition. Therefore, some people insist in banning the participation of extreme games. Personally, I do not share this opinion.

Even though ultimate games are dangerous for palyers, the safety of participators can be ensured with measures. Due to the exterme sports play grounds are mainly away from needy rescure, the condion of of the players who undergo an accident during participation ultimate games are pricarious. Thus, people think the government should prohibit people from playing extreme sports. However, players can protect themselves with advanced harness and portable first aid. For instance, the newest technologic halmet eschews the brain of participators who accidently fell of a height of ten meters atmost. Besides, easily portable first aid case contains every necessity for emergency.

Further more, no other sports can superside the excitement and thrill driver from the extreme sports. Skating, for example, requires skaters focuse attention to the unpredicable terrian during the high speed move. It significantly generates immense excitement when manuvering the sledge in the nature with unforseeable obstacles, which is nothing else can compare with. Additionally, sky diving offers an unprecedent opportunity for divers to experience the feeling of flying. With easy access to the sea and land, the sky diving experience is extremely rare for most people, which engender tremendous thril and excitement. Consequently, people love sports like skating and sky diving.

To recapitulate, the unique nature of extreme sports implys the danger that players may face. However, I do not agree the idea of prohibiting people from enjoy ultimate games. I believe the accidental tragedy can be elimited by proper measures. Besides, people love extreme games for the unique felling derived from them.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68813559322 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82922735648 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616949152542 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9119421645 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3157894737 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5263157895 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135132347871 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446517583041 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322856503841 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912309174179 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027518261469 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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