It is impossible to help all people around the world in need, so governments should focus on people from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely perceived that aiding global citizens is unfeasible, so the authorities should only place emphasis on people of their own country. Personally, I concur that helping people around the world is essential, but priority should be given to people from their own country.
There are innumerable reasons why government’s attention should be paid to local population, the most notable one is the credibility towards beaurocracy. Knowing that their needs are thoroughly fulfilled, the general public would feel grateful for what policymakers have done for them. For instance, there exist countless problems facing civilians in today’s world, namely housing shortage, water deficiency, poverty and crime, which potentially pose a serious threat to their well-being. Government intervention such as providing affordable housing units and subsidizing the underprivileged would therefore make them feel secure and salvaged. This could in turn instil a sense of patriotism among these individuals, thereby helping maintain social order. An explanation for this is people who are dissatisfied with national political system and social welfare may easily engage in activities that inflict damage to the nation’s security and cause harm to innocent people. Meanwhile, should domestic populace be provided with proper education and medical care, they would become skilled and healthier, function more productively and therefore make greater contributions to the national economy.
In spite of the justifications mentioned above, the state should land a helping hand to the needy from other parts of the world. Such is a smart approach that could not only facilitate unity between different cultures but also nourish reciprocity among Earthlings. Specifically, once a country gives support to the areas that are severely affected by natural calamities or wars, it would someday receive help in return if stroke by bad luck. Not only could the action foster peace between nations but it also creates a better world in which people would become less selfish and self-centered. It should also be noted that when assisting others, a country’s international profile would undoubtedly be bolstered. As a result, that nation could attract an influx of overseas investors and visitors, which proves to be fruitful to regional economic sector.
In sum, providing assistance to the national inhabitants is of significant importance, but offering help to those in need all over the globe should not overlooked due to its long-term benefits.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 209, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...eir needs are thoroughly fulfilled, the general public would feel grateful for what policymake...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'overlook'
Suggestion: overlook
...e in need all over the globe should not overlooked due to its long-term benefits.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59480519481 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95965335546 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638961038961 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8073008942 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.625 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253057455259 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779038174911 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869240180753 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166649452891 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106823073847 0.056905535591 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 209, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...eir needs are thoroughly fulfilled, the general public would feel grateful for what policymake...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'overlook'
Suggestion: overlook
...e in need all over the globe should not overlooked due to its long-term benefits.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59480519481 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95965335546 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638961038961 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8073008942 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.625 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253057455259 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779038174911 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869240180753 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166649452891 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106823073847 0.056905535591 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.