It is more important for governments to spend public funds on promoting a healthy lifestyle than treatment of people who are already ill.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The question of whether governments should invest money in promoting a healthy lifestyle or developments of treatment has been receiving a great deal of public attention Although allocating budget for health-promoting campaigns would be beneficial for citizens in terms of prevention of illness, the amount of money spent on treating serious diseases is much greater than that of preventing them
There are a number of factors contributing to a healthy lifestyle First of all, since some are ignorant of personal health, they are likely to suffer from related-food risks In fact, these people feel inclined to have excessive consumption of low-quality food, leading to serious diseases such as obesity or even cancer Therefore, by launching propagation campaigns about healthy lifestyle, local authorities enable their citizens to avoid such diseases and become healthy-conscious ones in the long run.
Nevertheless, spending money on treatment of patients who are already ill would be more outweighed than that of health-related campaigns First, there are some patients suffering from genetic diseases, who require to have special treatment Asthma, for example, is a testament to such diseases, doctors could eradicate the disease thanks to the improvement and development of treatment Second, investment in treatment is no less important and imperative due to the appearance of more contagious diseases This means that the outbreak of diseases like dengue fever posing a threat to human’s life, which needs to develop a treatment to prevent these diseases and ensure people’s safety now and down the road
In conclusion, given promoting a healthy lifestyle in some cases makes a contribution to the protection of illness, enhancing treatment for diseases would be far more significant By considering both perspectives, the government could find the best way of approaching this dilemma
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58823529412 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17936031872 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598615916955 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 16.0721442886 12% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 144.0 20.2975951904 709% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.5 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 807.5 106.682146367 757% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 144.5 20.7667163134 696% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 63.0 7.06120827912 892% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246725573766 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194441792026 0.084324248473 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036585140407 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14549730852 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464196873864 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 77.1 13.0946893788 589% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -83.14 50.2224549098 -166% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 60.6 11.3001002004 536% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.33 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 15.42 8.58950901804 180% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 9.78957915832 613% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 59.6 10.1190380762 589% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 60.0 10.7795591182 557% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.