It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than
world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Teaching history for schoolchildren has been a heated topic constantly. There is a
common belief that local history is more important to children than world history.
However, I disagree with this belief.
I believe the notion that local history is more valuable than world history should
be rejected. Some people may claim that the insights into the local historical
values are completely enough for one to live. Their claim could be true a few
decades ago when most interpersonal communications were between people of
the same race and origin. However, this view is now outdated, as the world has
become globalised and international business and migrant workers have made
any community a global village. In this context, an understanding of a foreign
country‘s history would enable future local workers to reinforce the relationship
between them and the expatriates from that country.
In addition, I am strongly convinced that children would benefit the most only
when the learning of local history is placed parallel to that of world history. To
understand a local historical event, children should put the regional and
sometimes even world context in that historical era into consideration. For
example, children should acknowledge that the event that Vietnam regained its
independence after defeating the Japanese troops in Indochina in 1945 only
happened after a series of relevant events in the World War II, one of which is the
surrender of Japan to the Allies. In this way of learning, children
would understand history more deeply and thoroughly.
All the existing data has provided a concrete foundation that the study of local
history should always be parallel to that of world history. This practice would guarantee that children learn history more comprehensively and be able
to tighten the bond with migrant workers in their country.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, may, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40878378378 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87110289433 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530405405405 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4088573158 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.357142857 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.07142857143 7.06120827912 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 24.0 4.38176352705 548% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216528375249 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088978597952 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677915828118 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.060113657325 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761899725302 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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