It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In many educational systems all over the world, there are a lot of students who lack the talent to learn artistic subjects like Art and Music. Many people think that they should still try to study these subjects, instead of changing to other subjects. In my opinion, I disagree with this approach.
It is a fact that a lot of famous artists and musicians around the world performed with little artistic ability at school. When they were children, if they had not followed art, they could not have become famous artists, composed lots of famous and valuable paintings. Furthermore, just because one is not good at something does not mean that he does not enjoy it, and learning should be fun as well as educational. These subjects may be necessary for them in the future, or entertain them. Creative activities like art also help them develop their imagination and make sense of the world around them by imagining shapes.
Nevertheless, if students are forced to study art, although they do not show interest in it or lack talent, this can bring about some disadvantages. Firstly, they will have to learn lots of subjects. This means, they would not have not enough time to study or do something that they are mostly interested in. As a result their talents may not be developed. Secondly, if someone has to do something that they do not like for a long time, it will be demoralizing for them, and could create negative effects. When they lack aptitude but they study with talented students, they will be slowing other pupils down, create rivalry, and anger and resentment may appear among them which could create conflict.
In conclusion, I mostly agree with the idea that if someone lacks talent learn artistic subjects, they should be made to change their subject.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82894736842 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50404796933 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549342105263 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8186875091 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338477799557 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11433407057 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587025542525 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211895425264 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220138299059 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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