Many companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages of this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Currently, there is a great number of organizations sponsoring sports in order to promote themselves. Many people believe this tendency would be disadvantageous for the world of sports, while others believe this would be more beneficial. Both sides and my perspective regarding whether this trend is advantageous or not will be mentioned in this essay.
On the one hand, there are several disadvantages of this occurrence. In order to organize sport events, the majority of companies sell low-quality products and unhealthy sustenance to earn more profit. For example, during Super Bowls, popcorn and beer are served for the spectators. This could lead to obesity and other health diseases. Additionally, since children are usually influenced by advertisements made by sponsor companies, their parents might lose a huge amount of money. Buying exorbitant but low-quality commodities would make the low remuneration families bear a financial burden. If these products were promoted, these families would save a great amount of money.
On the other hand, despite all of the disadvantages above, I believe this trend could have far more benefits. Due to the rapid development of sport, sponsoring sport teams would increase the income of the company. For instance, Jordan, which is a basketball shoes and accessories brand funded by Nike, is one of the most prevalent brand nowadays. Many people believe that Jordan 1 takes precedence over other Nike shoes. Additionally, by promoting themselves, these companies would be capable of employing more people. For instance, Nike provides job opportunities for thousands of people. Therefore, these organizations could make a massive contribution to society.
In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks of this trend, I believe this could have far more advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50896057348 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06775699013 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591397849462 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7535805973 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.3888888889 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282908261828 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828004120264 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611739148741 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181250481117 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672813479119 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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