In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.
Better public health facilities and good lifestyle increase life expectation in many states and bring the happiness for familly. However, it could bring problem to pension fund and lack of opportunity for youngster.
Nowadays, almost all hospital both in the developed or developing countries has better facilities, so the elderly people usually come to hospital regularly to check their physical condition. It means that, when they tend to ill, they will be cured earlier. For example, the former of Indonesian President namely Megawati, she always come to the private doctor to have medical routine, therefore if the physician find some illness, she will be treated early. In addition, the media constantly shared their opinion about good lifestyle such as daily exercise, bike to work and yoga. Both of them makes people healthier, and it create happiness in their family, because they can gather for the longer.
However, increasing life expectancies might be a problem for national budgeting. Because, the government have an obligation to pay pension fund for all retired workers. It means that, the authority has to allocated extra money, whereas that money could be disbursed for orphan or against poverty. Furthermore, increasing life span might be impacted to availability of jobs. Because, youngster often lose against senior workers based on experiences, and they have to wait for the senior worker to retire before replace him in the future. For example, in Indonesian bureaucracy, junior civil servant must queue to reach top position while it could takes time.
In conclusion, increasing natural life produce a problem for the government such as pension fund and jobs opportunity for youngster. But, it could give the happiness for people. Where possible, the government should allocated more money to pay pension fund by increase taxes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: creates
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, whereas, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37328767123 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70006176823 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8120328823 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0625 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.092886719113 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372760309607 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486716669182 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0669106864371 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292712163157 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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