In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, the ever-increasing health diseases are becoming one of the most serious threats to not only children at young ages but also the ones attending high school. Many hold the idea that the government should be fully accountable for this issue. However, I partly agree with this and also believe that, in some cases, parents and the children themselves are those to blame.
To begin with, holding the duty of maintaining a good healthcare for children is a vital role of the government. In many developing Western countries, fast food and processed food are being on sale through the social media on a regular basis. These are considered the reasons to multiple health risks including obesity or heart diseases, according to the experts. Therefore, the policy makers have an obligation to implement strict legislation to control the availability of such unhealthy food yet promote the number of advertisements about the benefits when practicing the habits of eating vegetables and fruit every day.
Nevertheless, despite the government's significance, parents and schools have to pay a close attention to their daily food intake. If parents did not let their offspring have an unbalanced diet and a lack of physical activities such as playing sports, lifting weights or doing exercises for at least half an hour a day, the rate of unhealthy young citizens would not be so high. In schools, there should be a certain number of lessons educating students about having healthy meals containing enough essential nutrients and vitamins. Reducing the amount of sugar for fat intake, for example, is a very helpful in preventing health deterioration.
In conclusion, in order to resolve this problem efficiently, the authorities, indeed, do play a significant role, but merely their effort shall not be enough. Parents and teachers also need to join hands in putting their children's diet in control.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many holds'.
Suggestion: Many holds
...ut also the ones attending high school. Many hold the idea that the government should be ...
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Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...very day. Nevertheless, despite the governments significance, parents and schools have ...
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Line 5, column 645, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ful in preventing health deterioration. In conclusion, in order to resolve this ...
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Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...utting their childrens diet in control.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21753246753 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87051732414 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649350649351 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1390948052 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.615384615 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141648528959 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047260901525 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328676279212 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807152466959 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389432093428 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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