In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should be have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that the childhood obesity and poor health are now becoming a serious problem in many countries. While I disagree that authorities should take some steps to deal with this issue, I strongly believe that parents also play a crucial role.
The role competent and responsible government is to ensure the well-being of its people. First of all, officials should adopt policies to fight against the childhood obesity crisis such as confining the mass consumption of fast food or the advertisement on TV. Another way leaders could take immediate action is that running health awareness campaign to encourage regular exercise and healthy diets.
Besides, parents are held accountable for the obesity and deteriorating health in their kids. On the one hand, most parents are anxious about whether a child could be malnourished when they grow up. Hence, they are willing to get their children what they want, which leads to forming unhealthy eating habits. This can be exemplified by eating junk foods or choosing healthy eating patterns that contain more sugar and fat. On the other hand, nowadays, a large number of youths tend to fall into a sedentary life, instead of going out and taking up sports. And parents are the only ones who could force or eradicate their children do what affect adversely their health.
To recapitulate, I would argue that the government should have the duty of combating obesity in children, I personally agree that parents also should join hand in curbing the obesity epidemic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, so, well, while, such as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.072 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59969228948 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9244418866 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.666666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176461051624 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564864073394 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492600819764 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108634725831 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454784028362 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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