In many countries, children are engaged in some kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experiences, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
Child labour is a controversial topic arousing heated debates from different parties involved such as factory owners, teachers, parents etc from around the world. It is challenging to decide which side is right without taking an insight look into different aspects revolving around both the child and the job.
On the one hand, working brings valuable experiences disregarding age. First of all, comparing to non-working children, employed child gains more in-depth perspective on how precious money can be. If a child has to work to earn pocket money, he will be less inclined to spend wastefully. This habit will follow the child into adulthood forming a saving characteristic which will be crucial if financial crisis ever happens. Second of all, in developing and underdeveloped countries, a child is forced to work at tender age to earn extra income no matter how small the amount is so that he can help out his family in his own way. In this case, it is difficult to judge whether it is right or wrong for the child to contribute to the family.
On the other hand, underage working may bring more harm than good especially in unfavourable working conditions. The prime example of this is China where children working in factories is a highly common occurrence because not only does it cuts down labour cost in term of salary, it is also cheaper to feed children compared to adult. Additionally, children do not have enough knowledge to demand as many rights and work safety conditions as adult. This is undoubtedly wrong as it violates human rights and abusing child labour.
In conclusion, in order to judge if it is right or wrong to let children work, we have to take a deep look at the purpose of working as well as working conditions and rights that children can have in this job.
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Essay evaluation report
at tender age
at a tender age
where children working in factories is a highly common occurrence
description: where children .... is a highly common occurrence ? can you re-write this sentence?
not only does it cuts down labour cost in term of salary,
not only does it cut down labour cost in term of salary,
as it violates human rights and abusing child labour.
as it violates human rights and abuses child labour.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1453 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.702 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.647 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.047 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'deciding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: deciding
...rom around the world. It is challenging to decide which side is right without taking an i...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cut'?
Suggestion: cut
...mon occurrence because not only does it cuts down labour cost in term of salary, it ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cut'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: cut
...mon occurrence because not only does it cuts down labour cost in term of salary, it ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8284789644 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69443082644 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582524271845 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6954093284 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.769230769 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1538461538 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202609626613 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771012035596 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498847023692 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127810928122 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716477943695 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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