Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men and possibly for women.
do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is undeniable that there are the mass of nations have applied mandatory arm duty for men subsequent to their schooling departures. Moreover, for some people this application should be carried out internationally even including women. Personally, I am on the reverse side of this initiative for some reasons.
Firstly, the military duty's primary aim is to ensure national defense and security. If all countries, however, implement it as a compulsory option, they seem be less safe. For instance, Soviet Union residents had to serve military causing the increase of soldiers. By dint of that, european nations joined in the arm race to protect themselves. Hence, there was no party felt secured and the world was always on the edge of global war.
Secondly, the more people serve military, the less workers in labour market are. Meanwhile, state budget has to be used to purchase for relevant equipments. As a consequence, it is likely raise the spectre of economy crisis. Take South Korea for example, government budget has to spend a huge amount ($200 billions) for military purpose per annum even in the recession. Finally, the mandatory military serve makes individual less competitive in their career. To be specific, the period of arm serve lasts at least twelve months mostly without contacting to the contemporary society in which people probably attain experience in work or such thing.
In conclusion, admittedly the national security is of the essence, but the other spheres absolutely worth being considered. Just as i suppose non-arm duty for a more prosperous and peaceful world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'at least', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i suppose', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248299319728 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.142857142857 0.155533422707 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.119047619048 0.0946595960268 126% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0578231292517 0.0501214627716 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0272108843537 0.0437548338989 62% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122448979592 0.122226691241 100% => OK
Participles: 0.030612244898 0.0403226058552 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82099190229 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030612244898 0.0326793684256 94% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0952380952381 0.0861772015684 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00340136054422 0.021408717616 16% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00340136054422 0.011925033212 29% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1620.0 1933.35771543 84% => OK
No of words: 258.0 316.048096192 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.27906976744 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20517956788 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.403100775194 0.374742101984 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.31007751938 0.28420135186 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.22480620155 0.203846283523 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151162790698 0.137316102897 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82099190229 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.037074148 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.56093040696 119% => OK
Word variations: 78.7932258877 60.7387585426 130% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.125 20.7743622355 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1126983722 49.517814964 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.25 127.492653851 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 20.7743622355 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.125 0.814263465372 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 47.132751938 49.1944974215 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.76119402985 1.69124875643 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209546520036 0.332605444948 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0458858735522 0.102741220458 45% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0508800933003 0.0668466124924 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479484642422 0.534860350844 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.112629030921 0.148594505496 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849491045033 0.134430193775 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627959866979 0.0742795772207 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.288666017219 0.324371583561 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0613478308927 0.0638462369009 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145523703935 0.228012699653 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668056868766 0.058150111329 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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