In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is sometimes argued that in the prospect of looking for a job, people will have to relocate to another place away from their friends and family. While there are some drawbacks to this phenomenon, I am of the opinion that the advantages it poses will be more significant.
On the one hand, this trend can highlight a number of valid concerns. The first drawback relates to people living far away from their friends and family, they could be in a serious lack of emotional support. This combined with possible stress from their workplace could potentially send them into a detrimental mental state, which will in turn adversely affect their physical health if left untreated. Another disadvantage is the fact that by working far away, sometimes even in a whole different country, they will likely contribute almost nothing to the local economy, making it further underdeveloped and scarce available jobs. This notion in the long run will possibly result in even more people being forced to work faraway from home because of the lack of jobs from an immature economy.
On the other hand, the idea of moving to another place for work is appealing to some extent. The first reason being that by coming to a different place, people could now have the opportunity to broaden their horizon as well as to expand the knowledge needed for a job. As a result, they are now exposed to a greater chance of advancing on their professional career as well as an academic career should they are interested, which will be near impossible if they just stay where they are. Another reason supporting this idea is the fact that people could take this chance to build their confidence and independence. This is because for some families, the parents could deliberately tend to be overbearing to their children, resulting in the the children becoming more and more dependant on them, and deprived of the ability to process things on their own. Living away from friends and family now will be a magnificent opportunity for them to learn to take care of themselves and be responsible foe their own actions.
To conclude, even though this trend poses some clear disadvantages, I believe the advantages will likely prevail due to the fact that people could benefit greatly from gaining confidence and knowledge by moving to a new place for work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Suggestion: the; the
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Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 396.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88383838384 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62635489348 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492424242424 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2315671182 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.142857143 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2857142857 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294298587591 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113384843183 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461786814283 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191651716858 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419209053585 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.