In many countries today, people buy a range of household goods (television, microwave, oven, and rice cookers) Is it a positive or negative development?

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In many countries today, people buy a range of household goods (television, microwave, oven, and rice cookers) Is it a positive or negative development?

Home appliance has brought significant benefits to our lives in the past fifty years. Yet there remain some disagreements as to whether the growing use of household goods is positive or not. While there are valid arguments to the contrary, it is my personal view that the benefits of them far outweigh the drawbacks.
First of all, it is an indisputable fact that household goods facilitates the way we do household chores. The microwave oven, for instance, allows us to cook rapidly with the turn of a dial, and this convenience provides more options in our daily life than in the past. Likewise, the rice cooker can simplify the cooking process by reducing the number of steps required to have a delicious bowls of rice. Thus, the more free time we save due to having such household appliances, the more other pursuits we are capable of doing at our will, including watching television after a heavy day from work.
Equally important, the growing use of house goods causes the users to be more intelligent. Were it not for television, it would be difficult for us to catch the news as well as watch live game show. Controlling these devices, furthermore, forces users to read the instruction and apply into practical cases, which in consequence make users wiser. Even though the risk of obesity resulted from the very comfortable life is real, it can be eliminated easily by not abusing them to an extent.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that purchasing household goods exerts positive impact on our lives rather than detrimental effects. In the year to come, I do believe that education programs showing how to use electronic device properly should be provided to reduce the risk of sedentary lifestyle.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...rs. Yet there remain some disagreements as to whether the growing use of household goods is p...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...levision after a heavy day from work. Equally important, the growing use of house goo...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, likewise, so, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88813559322 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72297301064 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637288135593 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4226767699 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.923076923 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133590745842 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454211918293 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498202604383 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745686348535 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297051485357 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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