Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree

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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that high level of sugar is one of the major causes of various health problems that are prevailing in the modern society. Several manufactured foods now contain higher level of sugar in order to enhance their taste. As a result of the deliciousness, people become attracted to them and make them a part of their food habit. I believe that if such products were expensive, the people will become less likely to consume them at least on a daily basis.

People eat fast foods and drinks, which contain harmful sugar and fat whenever they are spending time outside of their homes. Even some lazy people as well as students and worker who are always busy order fast foods in form of take-outs. So if fast foods and drinks become moderately costly, these people will be changing their food habits in order to save money. Furthermore, young children should be taught about the detrimental effect of unwanted nutrients (sugar and fat) on the body from an early age to divert them from sugary meals. Parents need to know how sugar can affect the body of a growing child. Currently, obesity and diabetes have become top diseases in young generation. To get a healthier new generation steps need to be taken against the manufacturers of fast foods.

Even though everyone seems to be aware of the side effects of sugary foods on their body, the sale of sodas and other soft drinks have skyrocketed in the past five years. The only reason behind is that the products have become cheaper due to their demand. So, the government should persuade the manufacturers to begin to look for an alternative to sugar. Green vegetables and fruits need to cheaper to promote healthy diet.

To conclude, changing one's habit is very difficult, specially if its their food habit. But with proper persuasion it might be possible. In this case, it can be higher price of products that will deter the customers away.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, so, well, at least, even so, no doubt, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68543046358 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41536942791 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562913907285 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.939829729 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.071428571 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303963783488 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956165406809 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565919730869 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205821799642 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347252717199 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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