Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, a prominent amount of sugar is detected in the majority of food and drink products which results in the deterioration of public health. Therefore, there are people suggesting that sugary commodities should have produced with higher costs in order to prevent people from consuming sugar. I partially agree with the statement based on the following arguments.
Firstly, it is undeniable that consuming many sugary products will bring negative impacts to our health. However, there are also other major products that contribute to health problems such as oily food, food with too much carbohydrate, or caffeine. Thus, getting rid of sugar by making the products expensive is not a wise approach to tackle the health issues whilst there are many other sources of causing health problems. Moreover, expensive sugary products will probably encourage people to buy less sugar but not directly contribute to lessening health struggles.
In addition, this choice can be counterproductive, in which people will possibly consume less sugar but depend more on other sugar-substituted products that can bring danger to their basic health. Some people are truly addicted to sugar so that they can prohibit consuming them for a few days but do binge-eating the sugary food later on which is much more threatening to their health. In some cases, those who eat sugar regularly might probably change their preference for caffeine. So obviously, if we were to raise the price of every product that people are addicted to, food prices will be sky-rocketing compared to the wages at the end of the day that will cause social issues.
Rather than increasing the price of sugary products, the stakeholders should consider putting limitations on the amount of sugar added, lowering the price of organic food, i.e., creating rooms for alternative choices, and should put equal restrictions on sugar-like products, for instance, oily food.
To conclude, expensive sugary commodities will surely make the customers consume less sugar. Nonetheless, it would not guarantee the downward trend of health problems facing these days so it would be better for government to consider more inclusive approaches to all the food products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...egative impacts to our health. However, there are also other major products that contribute to healt...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider putting'.
Suggestion: consider putting
...ugary products, the stakeholders should consider to put limitations on the amount of sugar adde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28231292517 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81690363472 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56462585034 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9417565269 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.181818182 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0909090909 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41795854509 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16817268073 0.084324248473 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693604705094 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280208889314 0.151304729494 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078136313709 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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