Many people hold the opinion that the reason for many health issues is that many processed food and beverage products contain high levels of sugar, and the government wants to substantially increase the price of sugary products to discourage people from buying these types of products. I completely disagree with this viewpoint, and in this essay, I will present the reasons for my view that there are two main reasons which explain why people consume so many processed foods and beverages.
To begin with, one of the most compelling reasons for holding my view is that people should have the right to choose whether they want to buy sugary products. This is due to the fact that the taste and preference of each person differs, and it would be more likely impossible for the government to continuously control the price of this type of food on the market. For example, since I love to eat sweet cakes, if the price of this kind of food is increased, I cannot afford the same amount as before, but I still buy and consume them. That is why after many countries implemented this solution, the rate of people eating sweet products decreased insignificantly. In short, it helps to demonstrate that making sugary foods and beverages more expensive does not discourage people from consuming those products.
Another convincing reason for my position is that education must take a significant responsibility in encouraging individuals to consume less sugar. This is because schools currently tend to focus too much on academic training and thus do not provide sufficient teaching on courses related to health and fitness. As a result, their students would not learn the value of a healthy lifestyle and consume sugar products without limitation. This explains why the number of people with health problems such as diabetes or obesity is increasing. In short, if schools incorporate sports courses into the curriculum so that students will become well-rounded in both physical and mental health.
By way of conclusion, I believe that people have their own personal choices of buying sugary foods and beverages, and schools have to teach students about health and fitness. Therefore, it is recommended that the government should not make sugary products more expensive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in short, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10483870968 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73027644558 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532258064516 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6025859841 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.642857143 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333995831702 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110058735596 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812789003978 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201672984954 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701501370727 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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